- A bit of added description, just for clearer imagery
- When Ernest is speaking about the image he keeps having, I’ve taken out the direction which says you’d see it on screen as it may have been a bit patronising for the audience
- I’ve taken out the Chaplain for two reasons:
1. I read that Chaplains weren’t always present. And it would have been unlikely for there to have been one at a time a crucial and supply stretch as December 1916 in Albert (the Somme was in November).
2. I wanted to remove the notion of God and religion- not entirely, as the Officer says ‘May God have mercy on your soul’, but the idea of the Chaplain passing him from one life to the next, I felt, disrupted my point. Ernest’s death is not so he can meet Rose in heaven, it’s a personal promise, he will see her in death, not in heaven. Ernest probably is a Christian, but his love for Rose is far more important to him than religion.
- The officer’s speech is changed slightly, and the name of Ernest’s commanding officer has been changed. That was actually just because I made a mistake with who Ernest Beeby’s superior officer was the first time round... Got him mixed up with another case I was reading about... woops.
- ‘six shots’ changed to twelve because of research
- Memorial shot added because I thought it would be nice.
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